The Knight of T (Rey_JJJ's RPC)

All right... finally, I get to join an RP Group! Blaze is so nice .

I've never done this sort of thing before, correct me if I do too wrong, but I think I've got the concept down.

(Also I may have overlooked something and add onto this page if necessary)

Name: Tristen (also called T or The Knight of T, abbreviated TKoT)

Gender: Male
Race: Soul-based Human

Weapons: A single-edged sword, only uses one-handed swords, but knows all the tricks with them

Appearance: Brown, spiked hair (4 distinct spikes overhead, 2 at side and 1 wide one in back); Plain white short-sleeved shirt with "Circled-T" emblem on front, number 99,999 on back; Brown "Mario" shoes; White skin (just barely tanned so he's not white like: ); Blue shorts with 2 large pockets at sides; Black eyes, white white-part-of-eyes; um... that's about it .

(If appearance seems odd, see reference pics below...)


Personality: Has the tendency to speak very peculiarly (e.g.: a normal person says, "Ha-ha! I killed you!"; T says, "I regret to inform you that you have been defeated."); If he can, will avoid talking (and point to/unveil something); Likes to take the initiative in battle, as well as leading teams; dislikes the heat, can stand up to somewhat sheer cold with just his short-sleeved ensemble; dislikes disgusting things and injustice (unless he's being the unjust one :shocked2: ).

Powers/Abilities: Took up water, wind, and ice magic--his favorite, bonded elements (meaning he's a water/ice type, and somewhat a wind-type)... his reasons for doing so vary; If he "gets his Final Smash" (saying he gets, like, mega-powered or something), then he can use...
--Power Copier: T floats up into the air, then aims his sword at a target of his choice, then fires a connective soul beam (if you've played SSBB, think a white version of a Dragoon shot) that pierces the foe, knocks several orbs of color out of the foe, then the orbs duplicate and half return to the target, the other half go to T and he gains an hour-lasting copied power (hence the name...) where his ensemble shifts to somewhat match the enemy's (mostly a recolor, might get, like, a headband or hat--yes, like Kirby). (Sorry for all the SSB references, but if he were in SSB and did this, he'd be the moveset clone... :smash: )
--Deflection: T can take a few moments to build up some concentration, then have the dexterity & agility to knock back anything (with consideration... I'll tell you if it fails, most cases it won't, though ). Lasts about 25 seconds (after that he lags).
--Flash-Freeze: Most handy ice-based skill (which is derived from, but not considered, magic) for T. He swings his sword back and puts out his opposite palm, dispelling an ice beam/wave of sorts. About 3 person-heights' reach.
--Lazer Firin*: If allows, T will fire his lazer at an intense emotional moment.
--Falcon Punch*: Same as Lazer Firin. Beforehand, T utters, "This is the only fire I'll accept."

*: Could be a joke, could be serious.
Back-Story: Tristen lived in the real world (the one you're reading this text from) and felt it to be a pointless, boring, inferior world. He had half the swordsmanship skill he does now, and basically spent his days searching for a way out through "missions" (which he excelled at... missions is like doing the cops' work, taking ads, whatever, right? Like quests.). This did not mean, however, that he was friendless... actually, he basically only had one friend, a frequent visitor, Kai.... One day, during a mission regarding ex-criminal "Zephyr Z", a computers expert with a team of hackers, T, Z, Kai (who had tagged along the mission), and the surviving hackers (there were none ) had all been warped into another universe by Dimensional Magic power from... another universe . Don't panic--another universe, in this case, is a small galaxy of fragments of planets (which are flat yet have equal gravity that always goes "down", due to the epicenter of the galaxy's "floor"). On a medieval fragment, in the small castle town, Spenn, T, Z, and Kai arrive on a hilltop. However, Z and Kai fell off and went missing. T became the town's hero after some feats, but he soon enough had the desire to see greater horizons, and using his knowledge of the real world, set out to the world's edge, and... fell off :shocked2: . This began a journey across the universe/galaxy/dimension where, during the time, Z had gained the Dimensional powers and sought to rule, so he used them to open up many more large portals all across and...people...copyrights...into this...long plot...heroes and villains...blah balh blah blah blah...okay, um, T learned to take the power of his souls (which were layered upon one another in his otherwise dead body, which make up his being and ability) to use different magic and skills... however, the souls contained within him that do not take precedence were released and became different beings: the pink soul of gratification and gratitude; the gray soul of strength and raw power; and the green soul of animalistic tendencies and perversion. The pink one became a neutral ally (don't bother telling me that's contradictory), the gray one became a fighter who follows whoever grants boons, and the green one became evil and tried many plots, unrelated and unaffected by Z.
Anyways, T became accustomed to, and familiar with, travelling with a variety of partners. Also, he can wield dimensional magic to get from one world to another, but not for free travel. Also, as the story finds out, T and Kai were creations of two boys in reality that had broken the shackles of fiction and escaped, for a time, then returned to "fictional" worlds. Bah! (As parallel to all the copyrighted characters, were creations of their companies' character developers; they were slightly based off of the copyrights, e.g. Mario's shoes on T.)

Present-Story: T FIGHTS FOR HIS FRIENDS AND THE PEOPLE HE'D LIKE TO BE HIS FRIENDS!!!

Inner mind: There is some info I cannot put down...for various reasons. This is primarily for the purpose of records and reference, to show that there may be an action or thought of T's, don't think I'm a "god mod" or "undefeatable". T does have key points--figure them out, nobody else knows . They do exist...

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So, how'd I do? I made a bio because T is my man. My character. The one I'd use anywhere... One that can shift to fit any RPG!

This is just my opinion, and I don't consider it in anyway more important than anyone elses.

I really don't like this Character. He may be your first, but you could have put so much more work into this. There are two key points that cause me to think this:

1. The Abilities, they're over-powered. You may not believe so, but in a Roleplay Battle, it is very easy to accidentally fall into God Modding. From a "Smash" point of view, T is God Tier. He can copy moves, deflect all projectiles, and freeze opponents (Not counting his other perks outside of specials). I just think you should either drop something or weaken everything.

2. The Whole Bio. A tip about Bio's is that quantity does not equal the quality. You may have a lot written there, but it lacks the depth of a good history. You might as well have just given the reader a wikipedia article about T.

I apologize for anything that seems rude, I only wish to help you out. I suggest a complete revision of the character...

You know something? I understand entirely.
(Gee, it almost feels like a necropost and whatnot .)

I think I just put down whatever was on my mind at the time--his story never was set in stone.

And about that "God Tier" thing... yup, that sounds right .
(Yes, I understand and stuff....)

I'll fix it up sometime, but I can't do so too soon, as my future forbodingly holds much work which'll need to be done: research project, moving, miscellaneous work... .

I understand as well, being a Sophemore in highschool with a recovering 1.9 GPA leaves little room for daydreaming on my part.

Tiduseya wrote:

I understand as well, being a Sophemore in highschool with a recovering 1.9 GPA leaves little room for daydreaming on my part.

Sorry for the continuing of off-topicness, but...
I'm a high school freshman with more than a 4.0 GPA .
Unfortunately, the move will cause me to be in a different school, which seems retarded as far as my mother and I are concerned--it doesn't offer the 2 Absolute Essentials !!
(Japanese & Programming)